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Soledad
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| | Subyek: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-28, 12:49 | |
| JYU-OH-SEI Intro: Our Father who is in heaven.
Your name be kept holy.
Your kingdom come, Your will be
done earth as in heaven.
Give us today our daily bread.
And forgive us our debts as we
have forgiven our debtors.
And lead us not into temptation
but deliver us from the evil one.
For Yours is the kingdom and the power
and the glory for ever. Amin. - Story:
Grayland and his twin brother Zackery banished to a planet the death penalty, Kilios. After both of their parents were murdered. They both should explore hutam filled with lush plants and man-eating monster. And also those who thirst for blood. Eventually they realize, to live in Kilios they should be "Beast" strong by getting rid of the weak.
Because only the strongest can be Jyu-Oh, The Beast King.
- Character:
Grayland Gruver
Male, Human, 14th, The Protagonist.
Physical.
Gray has blue eyes and gray hair. Short hair. Her skin was white and smooth. Thin lips and sharp nose. His legs were strong and his body a bit thin.
Clothing.
He wore a thin gray shirt without a collar. With green shorts. And a black belt. A sheath knife on the right side. Somewhat old-fashioned white shoes.
Personality.
Son of a brave, courageous, and hard-hearted. He always tried to protect his younger brother, Zackary. Always dare to try new things.
Zackary Gruver
Male, Human, 14th, The Protagonist
Physical.
Physically similar to Grey, but she has green eyes. And a little shorter.
Clothing.
He wore a thin white shirt without a collar. Black shorts with a tear at the bottom. And a black belt. Black shoes.
Personality.
A spoiled child, timid and whiny. Turned to nature with his brother, he always made the other person.
Third
Male, Human, 28th, The Protagonist
Physical.
His hair was black and long. Slightly brown skin. Her face was sweet. Black eyes and thin lips. He was tall and very strong legs.
Clothing.
He was wearing a black shirt with the collar up to the limit of his stomach to form V. With black trousers torn at the bottom. And the green belts. Black shoes. Bringing a rifle on his back and two blades on either side.
Personality.
Cold, and always seemed suspicious. Smart, but sometimes sneaky. His real name, he kept hidden.
Clairyn
Female, Human, 13th, The Protagonist
Physical.
His hair was black and very short. Slightly brown skin. Her face was sweet. Her eyes were black and thin red lips. She was short.
Clothing.
He was wearing a long shirt to his groin. Brown leather jacket. He also wore a white headband and a large circle earrings.
Personality.
Firmly against the others, especially men. His heart just melted at Grey. He is very concerned about Grey.
Terinspirasi dari kisah NATSUMI ITSUKI | |
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bungatepijalan
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darwoxs
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Soledad
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-28, 17:43 | |
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r15n4d1
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-28, 17:57 | |
| wah... harus buka google translator dulu nih  konsepnya mantap om  btw, masih pada muda ya... yang tua cuma 1 karakter doang  28 tahun tua  lanjutkan.. semoga jadi ojek  | |
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NachtEinhorn
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-28, 18:00 | |
| ebused  itu doa Bapa Kami? dan hubungannya ama cerita apaan? I LoL'd | |
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KID_VX
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-28, 20:26 | |
| - Quote :
- Iya, ini di ceritakan pada tahun 2456. Pada saat itu usia pernikahan adalah 15 tahun ke atas.
Karena angka harapan hidup manusia hanya pada umur 40 tahun.  perasaan sekarang pun udah banyak yang nikah umur 15 tahun, apalagi di daerah perkampungan angka harapan hidup manusia hanya pada umur 40 tahun , jadi maksudnya kemungkinan besar mati di umur 40 tahun kbawah | |
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Espada~
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-28, 20:35 | |
| konsepnya emang membernya pada masi kecil yah... mirip ama jepang di jaman sengoku aja.... tapi pas jaman itu umurnya ampe sekitar 50 tahun  btw... ojeknya yang dulu gimana nih...? ~~~ | |
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bungatepijalan
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maihime
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-28, 21:32 | |
| Kk Soledad, cerita dan konsepnya menurutku sudah bagus...  Tapi satu saja yang saya bingung dari awal. Perlukah anda menuliskan doa Bapa Kami di sini?  | |
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Soledad
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-29, 07:58 | |
| - r15n4d1 wrote:
- wah... harus buka google translator dulu nih
konsepnya mantap om
btw, masih pada muda ya... yang tua cuma 1 karakter doang
28 tahun tua
lanjutkan.. semoga jadi ojek emang begitulah, nanti akan lebih dijelaskan waktu jadi game project.. - Milan Nacht wrote:
- ebused
itu doa Bapa Kami?
dan hubungannya ama cerita apaan?
I LoL'd hubungannya adalah, kedua kembaran ini waktu intro sedang berdoa   - KID_VX wrote:
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- Iya, ini di ceritakan pada tahun 2456. Pada saat itu usia pernikahan adalah 15 tahun ke atas.
Karena angka harapan hidup manusia hanya pada umur 40 tahun. perasaan sekarang pun udah banyak yang nikah umur 15 tahun,
apalagi di daerah perkampungan
angka harapan hidup manusia hanya pada umur 40 tahun , jadi maksudnya kemungkinan besar mati di umur 40 tahun kbawah klo jaman sekarang kan nikah 15 tahun masih diluar hukum, tapi di jaman di wajibkan 15 tahun ke atas sudah menikah iya jadi kemungkinan 40 tahun adalah umur tertua pada jaman itu, intinya gitu. - espada951 wrote:
- konsepnya emang membernya pada masi kecil yah...
mirip ama jepang di jaman sengoku aja....
tapi pas jaman itu umurnya ampe sekitar 50 tahun
btw... ojeknya yang dulu gimana nih...?
~~~ ojek yang mana lupa - bungatepijalan wrote:
- Wait..wait..
Intro nya... doa Bapa Kami 
Can you elaborate apa maksdunya dan apa hubungannya? 
Mungkinkah doa meminta berkat untuk misi besar yg akan dijalankan?
~ Salam Ngacay dari Alissa Liu ~ waktu Intro game, playable character lagi berdoa untuk kedua orangtuanya dan saudaranya mungkin nanti bisa dijelaskan waktu jadi OJEK  - maihime wrote:
- Kk Soledad, cerita dan konsepnya menurutku sudah bagus...
Tapi satu saja yang saya bingung dari awal.
Perlukah anda menuliskan doa Bapa Kami di sini?
perlu, biar pada tobat  | |
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Espada~
Lolicious Driver
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-29, 09:04 | |
| - Soledad wrote:
ojek yang mana lupa yang School of fantasy ato jangan jangan malah udah selese ojeknya SoF..? ~~~ | |
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maihime
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-06-29, 14:59 | |
| Entahlah... Sebenarnya saya kurang senang dengan game yang membawa-bawa doa... Tapi semoga sukses dengan ojek anda!  | |
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W
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-07-07, 20:52 | |
| Emmm... Biar ga termasuk "SARA" doa nya jgn pke doa itu. buat doa sendiri aja kek doa minta rejeki, dsb Tapi gpp sih kalo emg mau begitu, ga da yg ngelarang | |
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Oscar
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| | Subyek: Re: Jyu-Oh-Sei 2011-07-07, 21:25 | |
| untuk urusan doa men doa sih gpp asal tidak offensive doanya. Kalo masih sebatas itu sih ga masalah CMIIW, oh ya? buat @TS screenshotnya dong hohoh ... atau artwork artwork gitu | |
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